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(MR. CYNICISM, MS. SINCERE, and DR. PASSION congregate for battle.)
DR. PASSION
Where's all the booze, guys? Where's the music? I thought this was supposed to be a party.

MR. CYNICISM
This is a battle, not a party, good doctor. You may want to remove your lamp shade so you can be prepared to fight.

DR. PASSION
I didn't hear anything about no violence at this here get-together-battle-party-what-have-you.

MR. CYNICISM
That is the definition of battle: Where two or more parties come together and -

DR. PASSION
- come together and make a whole lot of excitement between them. See? That's what I'm saying.

MR. CYNICISM
I should have anticipated such a gross misinterpretation of the facts, given your appalling track record with regard to such things as facts.

MS. SINCERE
I'm sure it was an honest mistake, a result of a miscommunication. We can all be friends still, right?

MR. CYNICISM
Aside from the battle, of course.

MS. SINCERE
Indubitably.

DR. PASSION
I wouldn't have it any other way.
(SENATOR IMPATIENCE steps in.)
SENATOR IMPATIENCE
I don't have all day, you realize. (spits) This battle must be over by quarter past; I have a -

MR. CYNICISM/MS. SINCERE/DR. PASSION (at once)
- I have a train to catch at half-past, so we'll have to wrap it up in under an hour.

MR. CYNICISM
Isn't that the case? Isn't that always the case with you? When you're around?

DR. PASSION
Yeah, why can't you loosen up once in a while? You're so uptight.

MS. SINCERE
It's because of all the stress. Being a senator puts one under enormous stress - with the schedule, with the responsibilities, with the secrets - isn't that right, senator?

SENATOR IMPATIENCE
Actually, I'm not in public office anymore.

MS. SINCERE
Retired?

DR. PASSION
Upgraded?

MR. CYNICISM
Impeached.

MS. SINCERE
Party politics?

DR. PASSION
Partying?

MR. CYNICISM
Perjury.

DR. PASSION/MS. SINCERE (together)
Wow.

SENATOR IMPATIENCE
It's very complicated, and it would take too long to explain. Can we please get on with this battle? I postponed a -

MR. CYNICISM/MS. SINCERE/DR. PASSION (at once)
- postponed a very important meeting to come do this.

SENATOR IMPATIENCE
(spits) Yes, indeed.

MS. SINCERE
Why are we fighting, again?

MR. CYNICISM
Because we agreed to. Simple as that.

MS. SINCERE
It just seems so... hurtful. So disrespectful towards each others' humanity and dignity. Each time we do this, I feel like there's something better we should be doing.

DR. PASSION
Like partying?

MR. CYNICISM
Like dying?

MS. SINCERE
Like doing mission work.

SENATOR IMPATIENCE
I haven't the time for that.

MR. CYNICISM
It doesn't do any good.

DR. PASSION
If mission work involved more partying, I could get behind it. But, y'know, as it stands now, I'd rather do battle.

MS. SINCERE
Is that the consensus? Is that the consensus of everyone here? Has it come to this? Friends, why can we not surmount this need to harm and ravage one another and, instead, do good to one another? Do words like sacrifice, compassion, and solidarity mean nothing to us? I wonder: Could someone seeing this believe in humanity's future - have hope in the generation to come? I am ashamed, and why you aren't honestly bewilders me. Why, I - I oughtta...
(MS. SINCERE swings the first punch, and the battle commences. Characters ad lib battle dialogue until all are worn out and lying down from exhaustion. This should take fewer than 45-60 seconds.)
DR. PASSION
Swell party, everybody.

MR. CYNICISM
It was a battle, you lugnut.

DR. PASSION
I am a doctor.

SENATOR IMPATIENCE
And I am a senator, but that doesn't mean very much, does it? (tries to spit and fails)

MS. SINCERE
To those who voted for you, perhaps.

SENATOR IMPATIENCE
I rigged that election, dear.

MS. SINCERE
Oh, well, I'm sure you had your reasons.

MR. CYNICISM
Now, I know I didn't hear you say that just now.

MS. SINCERE
I'm sorry.

MR. CYNICISM
You're always sorry.
(Pause.)
DR. PASSION
Good battle, guys.
(END OF PLAY)
An interesting little skit I started last summer but hadn't gotten around to finishing until recently. Now, I need some serious feedback.

Feel free to pick and choose whatever question(s) you feel most comfortable answering:
:bulletgreen: What is your impression of the characters' personalities?

:bulletgreen: Concerning the doctor and the senator, what gender(s) did you envision for the actors playing these parts? Explain.

:bulletgreen: Does the story work for you? Is it at all comprehensible?

:bulletgreen: How do you feel about the pacing up to the climax? Does it happen too fast/too slow?

:bulletgreen: Does the ending satisfy/annoy/confuse you? Describe.

:bulletgreen: How does the unconventional dialogue sound? How might the wording be improved?

:bulletgreen: What character(s) do you most identify with? How so?
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A Battle of Extremes is funny, witty commentary on archetypes by Same-side. ( Suggested by bookloverblue and Featured by neurotype )

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Cccelpro Featured By Owner May 6, 2014
living obama okno obama unz plz - animation 
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Same-side Featured By Owner May 6, 2014   Writer
Excuse me?
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Cccelpro Featured By Owner May 7, 2014
sorry 
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Okitakehyate Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014
I agree with the people who said that Dr. Passion should be more flamboyant and talk about more then just partying. Passions should run deeper then that like passion for life and passion for love making, Dr. Passion should be more recklessly impulsive and bubbling over with emotion. Dr. Passion should be sort of an insane mad doctor type of character if you ask me, sort of like Dr. Demento. The other characters personalities are perfectly suited to them.

I would say that  I envisioned males in the roles of Dr. Passion and Senator impatience, because Dr. Passion strikes me as being a self indulgent party boy (I think Dr. Hedonist would be more fitting for him), while the Senator is too crude and pompous to be a woman.

Kind of... but like others have said it would make more sense if it was explained how it got arranged especially seeing as nobody really had a reason for it or really wanted to be there.

No problem with the pacing.

Would have been more satisfying to know who won.

Sounds great, it's the best part of it, but could be improved by making Dr. Passion a lot less shallow.

I would say Senator Impatience.. I'm not a very patient person with most people when I have things I need to do, I like to just get on with things, but I also identify with Dr. Passion on the line "But y'know, as it stands now, I'd rather do battle." because I enjoy a good scrap. I'm far too optimistic to be Mr. Cynicism and not as uptight and morally self-righteous as Ms. Sincere.. though I do have my moments when I am like her when dealing with some people like my future mother-in-law.. especially when she gets to the point where after trying so hard the whole time to work things out peaceably and satisfy everyone she's just about had it and gets insulted enough to throw the 1st punch. That was a little twist I especially enjoyed. I often wish I could do that to my future mother-in-law.
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Myrikay Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Student General Artist
I envisioned it in a Waiting for Godot style. We don't know why we're here, we just know we are and it's for some reason. We don't know what we're waiting/fighting for but it must be important. We also don't seem to move around too much, but any movement deliberately feels pointless. 

I think you should add emotional cues. Like sarcasm and melodrama to Cynicism and Passion's voices respectively. 

For your Gender Question: I somehow associated everyone as male [though as I look back on it, I realize I misread "Ms. Sincere" as "Mr. Sincere"] If I were to direct though I would consider portraying everyone as the same gender to keep in feeling with the multiple sides to the same person feel that I got while reading. 

I found the ending a little confusing. It left me with the same feeling I had upon finishing Waiting for Godot. That's not to say it was in anyway boring, or that I didn't like it.

I liked Passion and Sincere's "Wow" at Cynicism's "Perjury" comment very much. I also liked the Senator's obvious impatience. He doesn't care that we're doing battle, he's concerned that it's taking too long. 

It's eye catching. I was scrolling past and happened to read the first sentence without meaning to in the DD bar near the bottom of the front page. Congrats~
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The-Raven-Soul Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Considering I write things that are very sudden, and add in plot elements later rather than bothering with an exposition, this story flowed perfectly well for me, although I would love to see why they decided to battle in the first place. I suppose there could have been a bit of a better lead up to the climax, giving Ms. Sincere even more reason to punch whoever she punched. I understand she had a reason, but it just feels like she'd be the type to still be able to restrain herself for a bit longer.
Other than that there's lovely dialogue; actually reminds me of the way my friends and I communicate, the flow is very natural and fitting to their personalities, except I suppose Dr. Passion, who seemed to be more of a Dr. Excitement to me.
Mr. Cynicism was absolutely perfect, and captures his extreme perfectly. 
Ms. Sincere was very sweet and kind, and yet the punch shows that she is very honest with her opinions.
Senator Impatience seemed to be a bit self-centered rather than nervous over time-wasting. He just wanted what he needed.

I, for some unapparent reason, envisioned all the characters as males other than obviously Ms. Sincere. I suppose it's because I've never encountered females with such personalities, other than Mr Cynicism, but he was already labeled.



So yes, overall, a lovely humorous play, I enjoyed it greatly! :meow: Thank you very much for writing it.
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DarcyM123 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014
Just reading the comments below, as I remember "Transactional Analysis" is a psychological theory that suggests we all have a Parent (dogma) Child (raw natural) and Adult (mature thinking) within us. It differs, but I think it is connected to Freud's Super-ego (Parent), ego (Adult) and Id (the Child) constructions. There is also a fairly famous book called "the Games People Play" by Eric Berne. It sets out some of the set piece, power plays people use within a "conversation" to get whatever it is they want. (Joe South wrote a fairly famous song, of the same name based on it in the 70's).

The Briggs Myer Personality types may also interest, if you have not seen before. 16 types as I recall, based on Carl Jung's 4 personality orientations (something like: Outspoken v quiet; Long term vs Short term focus; Head v heart driven; control v chaos plans). 

As you may guess, I enjoyed your piece. It brought to my mind, the Possessed/devils by dystovesky.  I think there is a "play" version by Albert Camus as well.

Regards,

Darcy
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LostGryphin Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Amazing work! Congrats on the DD.
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bronzian Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
What is your impression of the characters' personalities?: I think that the Sincere was accurate. I'm not too sure about Passion, I think he should be a lot more....flamboyant? *is that how to spell it?* Mr. Cynicism was awesome, but maybe more sarcasm?  I'm always being called a cynic by EVERYBODY, and I'm extremely sarcastic. So yeah, I relate to Mr. Cynic over there.
Cynic Emote <<---Apparently that's a cynic emote.
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arcanehalo Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Student General Artist
I like it, it's adorable.

But I kind of wish Passion did more than repeatedly ask for a party. Parties in my mind are a much more lighthearted thing than passion. It's just the word itself I suppose. I think Passion is a little close to impatience.

Also Senator Impatience seems more like Senator...Selfish? other than the fact that he's hoping to wrap things up and jet off, he just seems self-centered. Like he has better things to do that have nothing to do with anyone else. Also he rigged things for him to be on top. It just seems rather selfish than impatient.

But anyway I think it's was entertaining, it was fun to imagine up on a stage. I'm a bit on the side of Mr. Cynic. As a self-proclaimed cynic and an INTJ I feel many feelings for this guy and adore his dialogue. XD
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