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Here, in this sin-cursed city,
a good Providence of
wonders has been wrought.
Within the limits of
a thousand particulars,
assurances were given.
I trusted the law,
and it was a greater wonder.
Now all the lies
in the miserable designs
need hardly allude that
uniting the separated families
by resignation or death
will be the perfecting of a means,
which, in the present unorganized state of affairs,
is greatly needed.
Facts furnish that,
within the lines of the army,
when children are
expelled from their homes,
any vacancy occurs.
a good Providence of
wonders has been wrought.
Within the limits of
a thousand particulars,
assurances were given.
I trusted the law,
and it was a greater wonder.
Now all the lies
in the miserable designs
need hardly allude that
uniting the separated families
by resignation or death
will be the perfecting of a means,
which, in the present unorganized state of affairs,
is greatly needed.
Facts furnish that,
within the lines of the army,
when children are
expelled from their homes,
any vacancy occurs.
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This is very well done. Especially when viewed in conjunction with the news article. My one critique (which isn't really a critique) is that this seemed more like a poetic adaptation than an inspiration. So i like that you put Inspired/"Found", because it does seem quite found. It's a piece that doesn't seem to have the sort of impact one typically thinks of when thinking of poetry (pathos). Yet, I can't quite get it out of my mind. In that sense, more of a logos frame, it has a huge amount of impact. Especially in the middle of the piece:
'I trusted the law,
and it was a greater wonder.'
That is incredibly powerful. Even the last lines have that sort of impact. At the end of the piece, it almost seems like there is more to be said. that it isn't the end of the story. That usually leaves me feeling strange and unsatisfied, but here, it works. While the poem is limited in that it may lose some meaning without the news article accompanying it, it draws a lot of strength simply from the wording and the pacing. It reads almost like a monologue. It is something that I could envision and actor preforming. These words would sing on a stage.
Overall, this is a very strong piece. Well done.
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'I trusted the law,
and it was a greater wonder.'
That is incredibly powerful. Even the last lines have that sort of impact. At the end of the piece, it almost seems like there is more to be said. that it isn't the end of the story. That usually leaves me feeling strange and unsatisfied, but here, it works. While the poem is limited in that it may lose some meaning without the news article accompanying it, it draws a lot of strength simply from the wording and the pacing. It reads almost like a monologue. It is something that I could envision and actor preforming. These words would sing on a stage.
Overall, this is a very strong piece. Well done.
[From PowerfulWriting]